Kristen Chapter #24: Almost Golden
End of the story, epiloge to How Kristen spent her summer vacation
Letters : 1040 Words : 190
Well, thats it. My first story. All done.
Not really much of a story, I suppose. Almost a novel, totaling 55,754 words. Printed out from my word processor, its 133 pages, and scarcely anything has happened.
My apologies to everyone Ive bored or annoyed. My thanks to all who have followed the story through thick and thin.
Many thanks to Rowan, whose original idea got me started on this story, and to all those who have posted or e-mailed words of encouragement. I cant tell you how much Ive appreciated those commentsthey are the whole reason Ive sat here for months, staring at this blank screen and pecking out these words.
Of course, this is not the end of Kristens summer, by any means. But its the end of the beginning.
Theres a long summer ahead, and Ill bet theres an interesting story for each and every day. I hope that some other writers might want to tell a story or two from Kristens best summer ever.
Sunday, 09-01-11 16:08
I would like to see how Kristen did with Tony. And how Kristen made out at the house with Brenda and Marcie. I am sure Kristen's folks made it down to the beach again.
Sunday, 10-10-10 11:02
Thank you for this story. I can really relate to it and to Kristen and it has helped me a lot in understanding a few things about myself. You said you thought nothing happened, well I read it all, nearly in one go. I'd sure say it is in full uniform — fit for its job at this beautiful site. :)
Tuesday, 28-09-10 14:35
I enjoyed the story of Kristen and the lifeguards. Your illustrations of what Kristen was experiencing as she made the transition back to being a nudist was pretty detailed and believable. The extra experiences of being a nude roommate seemed to require a little more imagination to believe, but I got each justification for the behavior as you presented the scene. I hope you will write more or continue demonstrating how textiles and nudists may co-exist peacefully with each other. Nobody has the right to dictate how someone should live their life so long as the behavior does not endanger others. As a society we are gradually allowing individual expressions of freedom to expand and I hope the belief in clothesfree living will eventually be among them.
Monday, 13-09-10 22:30
Congratulations on writing your first story; as a writer myself, I understand the pangs of that creative process. Although I read the entire piece, I found it increasingly challenging to maintain my interest. There are several inconsistencies inherent in the narrative style that you employ and the intended message that I perceive to be your goal. Most importantly, I found your frequent use of coercive methodologies and intimidating emotional manipulations disturbing. The piece, in my opinion, does not portray nakedness as a natural condition meriting casual indifference, but rather repeatedly sensationalizes it as a source of either sexual stimulation or interpersonal derision. Lastly, there is considerable descriptive detail included that does not help communicate the story.
Here are some thoughts for you to consider when engaging in future writing projects. What is the essential message of the piece? What environmental and character details are necessary to convince the reader of that message? How can those elements be arranged to create narrative tension using the greatest economy of words? And most importantly, does sharing the message serve your interests or those of your readers?
Keep trying... better luck next time!
Tuesday, 17-11-09 18:11
This was a great story. Looking forward to reading more.